Talent or Hard Work?

Some people say that without hard work, you can (not) achieve anything. On the other hand, some other people say that without talent, no matter how hard you work you can't succeed. I think that in order to succeed on something(ww.), you need both of(מיותר) talent and hard work, and you can't be the best if you don't have on of these(phr.).

If you have natural talent on something(ww.) and you know that you (verb?) really good at it, but you are not working(gr.) hard to improve your skills and abilities and you just depend on your talent to succeed, eventually, you will fall behind the one who working hard around the clock and keeps imporve himself(phr.) - This is a run-on sentence that needs to be divided at least in two.

Although(ww.), sometimes, talent is enough to succed in life. If a talented person combine(gr.) hard work as well, he will be alot more successful then(sp.) the only(ww.) who just working(gr.) hard but dont(gr.) have the natural talent and knowlege.- your are generalizing and repeating yourslef. You need to focus your writing, think of 2 seperate arguments and include examples.

To conclude, I think if you combine talent and hard work, you will be the most successful on that thing(ww.) becasue you will maximize you potentail, and(מיותר). (Start a new sentence) that (is) why I think both of talent and hard work are needed to succeed in life - that's for sure, but the question is which do you need the most.... Look at the writing task again.

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Daphna

Post Reading - All My Sons (2)

Chris' diary: Coming back from the war.

Dear diary, 
I survived the biggest war that the world has known so far, and I am finally back home. Actually, I am the only one who made it. All my brothers from my squad are dead or missing, and I am the only one who got to live after the bloodbath. I feel that I have to be better now, and succeed in everything I do.

When I saw mother and father again, I cried like a little girl. I didn't see them for the last 3 years, and they didn't changed(gr.-change) at all. Father is still runing(gr.-running) the business and he will probably ask me to join him when I  look for a job. And mother, well..... I didn't even gets(gr.-get) home and she is(gr.+ww.- started) telling me that I need(gr.-needed) to get a wife and a solid job. I think she really needs to change her view on the world. I mean, life is more then getting a wife and a job. People were dying like flies in the war so people like my mother will(gr.-would) live. And then(מיותר) she talks with(ww.-to) me about getting a job.

I keep thinking about Ann. I wonder how she is getting along with Larry's death. She must be so sad and miserable. Mabye I shuold(sp.-should) send (her) a letter to her(מיותר), and see how she feels. Who knows, mabye(sp.-maybe) I can make her feel better.

Well, there is much more I would like to talk about, but I think that's enough for one day. I just came back and I (am) very tired. Until next time.
(Chris)

Good work. This is better but you still have quite a few grammar mistakes.
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Daphna